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[2024/ 3/ 16] The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

【主体段分段】：

方法1：按照<时间>分段 （本篇文章按照此种分段方式）

方法2：按照<趋势>分段

Body 1：working，relaxing，travelling一段【整体上升趋势】

Body 2：going out，sleeping, others一段【下降趋势&平稳】

【开头段】

The pie charts illustrate changes in the proportion of time that working adults spent on different activities in 1958 and 2008.

【概述段】

It is clear thatin both years, workingaccounted for the largest percentageof time,whilethe surveyed people spent the least proportion of time on commuting.Also, the figure for going out witnessed the most dramatic change.

思路要点：

- 两年中working占比都最高，但travelling to work占比都最低

- going out变化最急剧

【Body 1】

Looking at the information in more detail, we can see thatin the initial year, 33% of the time was allocated to working,closely followed bythe figure for sleeping(32%).By contrast,people onlyspent 2% of their time oncommuting. Going outtook up19% of a day, and this figurewas more than twice the figure forrelaxing at home. The proportion of time distributed to other activities such as hobbies and playing sports was 6%.

思路要点：1958年

- working占比33%，sleeping紧随其后占比32%

- travelling to work占比仅为2%

- going out占比19%，是relaxing at home的两倍多

- others占比6%

【Body 2】

In the year 2008, the proportion of time people spent on working and relaxing at homesaw a remarkable rise to42% and 13% respectively.The most drastic change could be found inthe time allocated for commuting,with the figure growing by4 fold.By contrast,there was a sharp decline inthe percentage of time distributed to going out and sleeping by 13% and 7%.In this year,people still spent 6% of their time on other activities.

思路要点：2008年

- working和relaxing at home：显著上升

- travelling to work：变化最急剧，上升了4倍

- 对比而言，going out和sleeping急剧下降

- others不变